IF I COULD GO BACK IN TIME - Task for Meeting 6

Goodbyes are not forever.

Goodbyes are not the end.

They simply mean I’ll miss you...

Until we meet again!

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Rest In Peace, Alligator!

          It would be an amazing thing for me if I could go back and live in the past. Many years passed before I understood the meaning of friendship. If I could ask to God, I wish I had one more chance to go back to my past, fixing all of my mistakes I had ever done to my best friend.

          When I was in junior high school, I thought that I had found a true friend. Her name were Effy, but I often called her "Alligator". She never minded about it. I and Effy were in the same class since we were in seventh until tenth grade. We also sat in the same bench. She was a beautiful and smart girl. I was happy that I had a good friend like her.

          Day by day, we were getting closer. I often come to her house to do our homework. Sometimes, I came in just to chat and share about my problems. She was very kind. She always had a solution of my problems. Her mom was very kind too. She often made us cake or some foods when we were doing our homework and studying together. But I seldom met her father, she said that her father was always busy working.

          Ever since, we made a silly thing in the class. We were partner in crime. When I felt boring to follow the class, suddenly I had an evil thought. I told it to Effy, and she agreed about that. We treated our physics teacher badly just because we hated the subject. As a result, we got a punishment to stand in the field under a flagpole until the subject ended. Actually I knew that Effy was good at physics, but I did not know why she hated it too.

          When we were standing in the field for about 30 minutes, suddenly Effy fainted. I was panic and decided to tell it to my teacher. My teacher picked her up to the hospital soon. After arrived there, a doctor checked her condition. The doctor said that she was just very tired. I felt so sorry about that. It was my mistake that caused Effy fainted. When she awared, she said that it was not my mistake at all.  She tried to support me when she was the one who need it.

          One morning, as usual, I went to school. I opened the door and walked into a room. I found Effy was sitting alone in the class, there was no one else around. She did not know if I was coming because the door was behind her. I thought that she was still writing something in the diary book. But, something felt a little different. When I was getting closer to her, I saw her face was so pale. I touched her skin, so cold. Then, I was so shocked when I saw some bloods were filling her dairy book on the table. I asked her what actually happened. No words spoken, but silence. She did not answer my question. Once more I asked her, finally she told me that actually the doctor said to her that she had diagnosed a leukemia but she did not want other people know about it. I was like “You are kidding, aren’t you?”. “No, this is serious. But you don’t need to tell it to others. Would you promise?”, she said. “Yes” I replied her question while crying, but suddenly some students were coming to the class. Then, we started to act like nothing just happened.

          The next day, I come to the class but I did not see Effy there. I was thinking what happened to her over and over again. After school was ended, I decided to come to her house. I asked to her housekeeper, he said that she was in the hospital. I was panic and I asked him the address where she was cured.

          I came to see her in the hospital. I met her parents and they said that she was still doing an operation. We waited her for about one hour. Then, when the doctor went out of the room, he said “Sorry, she could not fight leukemia anymore.” I cried and I wonder if it was just a nightmare. But God had more beautiful place for her. Her wonderful eyes were closed on 31st December. That day the sun lost its light and I lost my best friend forever.

          Now If I could go back to my past when I and Effy could still laugh together. I promise, I would never make her cry even a bit. I would always make her happy whatever it takes. It’s true, she will never come back, but she always gets a special place in my heart.

Note : Blue - Orientation | Red - Complication | Green - Resolution | Yellow - Coda

Narrative Writing - Task 5

Description of Narrative Writing

        Narrative writing tells a story that happens in the past. Good narrative writing is more than a list of random events. It sets up the tale, builds to a high point, and winds down during the resolution. Narrative writing usually has tension – a problem to be solved or a challenge to be overcome. There is a reason for the telling. It also has a setting (a time and place within which events occur) and characters (who may include the narrator, the person recounting the story).

How is Narrative Writing Different from Other Writing Genres?

          Narrative writing and recount writing are almost same. They tell about past events. What makes narrative different from other genres especially recount is that narrative writing has tension or a problem/conflict to be solved, it may end with sad or happy ending. While recount writing only tells about series of events in the logical order.

Here’s the difference between them :

·        Narrative Writing

       

·        Recount Writing

How to Make a Narrative Writing

          To write a narrative essay, you’ll need to tell a story (usually about something that happened to you) in such a way that he audience learns a lesson or gains insight. Tell a story about a moment or event that means a lot to you--it will make it easier for you to tell the story in an interesting way!

Steps for writing effective narrative :

Introduction

·     The introduction grabs the reader’s attention.

·     The setting for the story is described.

·     Some characters are introduced.

·     Give a hint of the problem to come.

Example :

Body

·     Can be single or numberous paragraphs.

·     Provide lots of details, adjectives, adverbs and action words.

·     The problem or excitement is outlined.

·     All characters are introduced and discussed.

·     Conside the sequence of events.

     Example :

Ending

·     Final resolution of the problem.

·     The ending is effective; could be happy, startling, sad etc.

·     Provide a final thought or moral message (coda)

    Example :

Showing the Topic Sentence in Our Narrative Writing

PLAN B

            One of bad experience in my life was failure of being accepted in the university. It happened after my father bought me a new notebook. I was a good student actually. People called me Ritma.

            In the beautiful day, I was very happy that my father bought me a notebook, it was a cool thing that I really wanted for a long time. Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. I spent my whole days in front of my notebook without any reasons. I did not really care anymore about my school, my grade, or even people around me.  I felt more alive in my own world. My mother asked me to stop it and started studying because the test enter a university was closer, I just answered by saying “yes, mom...” but I did not do it at all.

            One day, my father found that I never studied for the test, he was angry then decided to send me to join the course for about one month and I said “okay”. It did not change anything at all. After went home, I did the same thing just as before.

            The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. I still did not have any idea what I had learnt from my course, I just answered the questions that I knew, and the rest were by my own instinct. After that, my parents asked me about the test, I just simply said that it was not that bad. They seemed did not trust my words, I just smiled. My father said that if I could not pass the test, he would be very angry and about to do a bad thing or somekind of that. I thought that he would like to kill me.

            Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online. I could not hide my fears anymore. My parents impatiently waited me to say a word, I knew that they really wanted me to say “I am accepted”. I opened my account and checked it. I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”. I was confused how to tell that to my parents. I knew for sure that they would be very angry if they saw it, but I decided to let them knew and I had to take all the risk that I had made. I listened to all my father’s anger and I just cried without any words came out by my mouth. That day was so gloomy and my eyes were so puffy because of my tears.

            Suddenly, my mother said to me slowly to stop crying, but I cried even harder and just could say sorry. She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. So, my mother asked me to prepare all the things to register on the other university, and she said that she did not want to see me sad anymore. I thanked her so much. At that time, I thought that my mother was a very kind person in the world. Then, I started to study hard and promised to never do the same thing anymore.

            Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I had learnt many things from that experience, never go full retard, do not be lazy to study, and always listen to your parents’ words. “Success” depends on the second letter of the word. If plan A  did not work, the alphabet still has 25 more letters.

Explanation about ‘Why ARE They Called as Topic Sentences’

Topic Sentence	Reason
One of bad experience in my life was failure of being accepted in the university. ... (paragraph 1)	This sentence is called topic sentence because it contains a complete sentence. Then, it is the main topic that will be developed in supporting details.
Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. ... (Paragraph 2)	This is called topic sentence because it is the keywords about what will be explained more in the next sentences or paragraphs. It tells about ‘insanity’ or doing the same thing over and over again. It also brings to the complication or problem.
The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. ... (Paragraph 4)	This is a topic sentence because the next sentences are the detail information about how the test occurs.
Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online. ... (Paragraph 5)	This is a topic sentence and the next sentences explain how the result of the announcement, such as “I opened my account and checked it, I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”, etc.
She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. ... (Paragraph 6)	‘She’ refers to ‘’my mother”, this called topic sentence because there’s a keyword ‘Plan B’ that will be explained in the next sentences.
Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. ... (paragraph 7)	This is the topic sentence of conclusion or ending. Then the next sentences talks about the lesson of this failure experience.

Identifying Narrative Paragraphs with and without Topic Sentence

“Success is not final, failure is not fatal. 

It is the launching path for your life's encore”

Through this essay, I have a purpose that people who read this essay will learn a lesson from my failure experience and hopefully they will never experience the same thing just as I did before.

Plan B

            One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university. It happened after my father bought me a new notebook. I was a good student actually. People called me Ritma.

            In the beautiful day, I was very happy that my father bought me a notebook, it was a cool thing that I really wanted for a long time. Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. I spent my whole days in front of my notebook without any reasons. I did not really care anymore about my school, my grade, or even people around me.  I felt more alive in my own world. My mother asked me to stop it and started studying because the test to enter a university was closer, I just answered by saying “yes, mom...” but I did not do it at all.

            One day, my father found that I never studied for the test, he was angry then decided to send me to join the course for about one month and I said “okay”. It did not change anything at all. After went home, I did the same thing just as before.

            The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. I still did not have any idea what I had learnt from my course, I just answered the questions that I knew, and the rest were by my own instinct. After that, my parents asked me about the test, I just simply said that it was not that bad. They seemed did not trust my words, I just smiled. My father said that if I could not pass the test, he would be very angry and about to do a bad thing or somekind of that. I thought that he would like to kill me.

            Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online, I could not hide my fears anymore. My parents impatiently waited me to say a word, I knew that they really wanted me to say “I am accepted”. I opened my account and checked it. I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”. I was confused how to tell that to my parents. I knew for sure that they would be very angry if they saw it, but I decided to let them knew and I had to take all the risks that I had made. I listened to all my father’s anger and I just cried without any words came out by my mouth. That day was so gloomy and my eyes were so puffy because of my tears.

            Suddenly, my mother said to me slowly to stop crying, but I cried even harder and just could say sorry. She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. So, my mother asked me to prepare all the things to register on the other university, and she said that she did not want to see me sad anymore. I thanked her so much. At that time, I thought that my mother was a very kind person in the world. Then, I started to study hard and promised to never do the same thing anymore.

            Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I had learnt many things from that experience, never go full retard, do not be lazy to study, and always listen to your parents’ words. “Success” depends on the second letter of the word. If plan A  did not work, the alphabet still has 25 more letters.

NOTE :

• Theme: Failure Experience.
• The plot which is used is backward.
• The characters in the story are Ritma, Ritma’s father and Ritma’s mother.
• The first paragraph is called orientation. The green colour is indicated as introduction of the main character.
• The second paragraph is as pre-complication, it is a beginning of the conflict or climax.
• The third paragraph until the fifth paragraph are climax of the complication.
• The sixth paragraph is as post-complication, it is a breakthrough of the climax and it starts to show a solution of the complication.
• The seventh paragraph is as a resolution of the complication. There’s also a coda or moral message which summarizes the point of the story. White colour is as a coda or moral message of the whole story.
• Orange colour is as transition, or time order.

ANALYSIS

Topic sentence : One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university.

Controlling idea : It happened after my father bought me a new notebook.

Introduction :  One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university. It happened after my father bought me a new notebook. I was a good student actually. People called me Ritma.

Supporting detail 1 :  At that time, I was very happy that my father bought me a notebook, it was a cool thing that I really wanted for a long time. Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. I spent my whole days in front of my notebook without any reasons. I did not really care anymore about my school, my grade, or even people around me.  I felt more alive in my own world. My mother asked me to stop it and started studying because the test to enter a university was closer, I just answered by saying “yes, mom...” but I did not do it at all.

Supporting detail 2 : One day, my father found that I never studied for the test, he was angry then decided to send me to join the course for about one month and I said “okay”. It did not change anything at all. After went home, I did the same thing just as before.

Supporting detail 3 : The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. I still did not have any idea what I had learnt from my course, I just answered the questions that I knew, and the rest were by my own instinct. After that, my parents asked me about the test, I just simply said that it was not that bad. They seemed did not trust my words, I just smiled. My father said that if I could not pass the test, he would be very angry and about to do a bad thing or somekind of that. I thought that he would like to kill me.

Supporting detail 4 : Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online, I could not hide my fears anymore. My parents impatiently waited me to say a word, I knew that they really wanted me to say “I am accepted”. I opened my account and checked it. I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”. I was confused how to tell that to my parents. I knew for sure that they would be very angry if they saw it, but I decided to let them knew and I had to take all the risk that I had made. I listened to all my father’s anger and I just cried without any words came out by my mouth. That day was so gloomy and my eyes were so puffy because of my tears.

Supporting detail 5 : Suddenly, my mother said to me slowly to stop crying, but I cried even harder and just could say sorry. She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. So, my mother asked me to prepare all the things to register on the other university, and she said that she did not want to see me sad anymore. I thanked her so much. At that time, I thought that my mother was a very kind person in the world. Then, I started to study hard and promised to never do the same thing anymore.

Concluding sentence : Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I had learnt many things from that experience, never go full retard, do not be lazy to study, and always listen to your parents’ words. “Success” depends on the second letter of the word. If plan A  did not work, the alphabet still has 25 more letters.