Identifying Narrative Paragraphs with and without Topic Sentence

“Success is not final, failure is not fatal. 

It is the launching path for your life's encore”

Through this essay, I have a purpose that people who read this essay will learn a lesson from my failure experience and hopefully they will never experience the same thing just as I did before.

Plan B

            One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university. It happened after my father bought me a new notebook. I was a good student actually. People called me Ritma.

            In the beautiful day, I was very happy that my father bought me a notebook, it was a cool thing that I really wanted for a long time. Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. I spent my whole days in front of my notebook without any reasons. I did not really care anymore about my school, my grade, or even people around me.  I felt more alive in my own world. My mother asked me to stop it and started studying because the test to enter a university was closer, I just answered by saying “yes, mom...” but I did not do it at all.

            One day, my father found that I never studied for the test, he was angry then decided to send me to join the course for about one month and I said “okay”. It did not change anything at all. After went home, I did the same thing just as before.

            The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. I still did not have any idea what I had learnt from my course, I just answered the questions that I knew, and the rest were by my own instinct. After that, my parents asked me about the test, I just simply said that it was not that bad. They seemed did not trust my words, I just smiled. My father said that if I could not pass the test, he would be very angry and about to do a bad thing or somekind of that. I thought that he would like to kill me.

            Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online, I could not hide my fears anymore. My parents impatiently waited me to say a word, I knew that they really wanted me to say “I am accepted”. I opened my account and checked it. I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”. I was confused how to tell that to my parents. I knew for sure that they would be very angry if they saw it, but I decided to let them knew and I had to take all the risks that I had made. I listened to all my father’s anger and I just cried without any words came out by my mouth. That day was so gloomy and my eyes were so puffy because of my tears.

            Suddenly, my mother said to me slowly to stop crying, but I cried even harder and just could say sorry. She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. So, my mother asked me to prepare all the things to register on the other university, and she said that she did not want to see me sad anymore. I thanked her so much. At that time, I thought that my mother was a very kind person in the world. Then, I started to study hard and promised to never do the same thing anymore.

            Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I had learnt many things from that experience, never go full retard, do not be lazy to study, and always listen to your parents’ words. “Success” depends on the second letter of the word. If plan A  did not work, the alphabet still has 25 more letters.

NOTE :

• Theme: Failure Experience.
• The plot which is used is backward.
• The characters in the story are Ritma, Ritma’s father and Ritma’s mother.
• The first paragraph is called orientation. The green colour is indicated as introduction of the main character.
• The second paragraph is as pre-complication, it is a beginning of the conflict or climax.
• The third paragraph until the fifth paragraph are climax of the complication.
• The sixth paragraph is as post-complication, it is a breakthrough of the climax and it starts to show a solution of the complication.
• The seventh paragraph is as a resolution of the complication. There’s also a coda or moral message which summarizes the point of the story. White colour is as a coda or moral message of the whole story.
• Orange colour is as transition, or time order.

ANALYSIS

Topic sentence : One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university.

Controlling idea : It happened after my father bought me a new notebook.

Introduction :  One of bad experience in my life was failure to be accepted in the university. It happened after my father bought me a new notebook. I was a good student actually. People called me Ritma.

Supporting detail 1 :  At that time, I was very happy that my father bought me a notebook, it was a cool thing that I really wanted for a long time. Everything was fine in the beginning, but as the time went by, my whole days turned into an ‘insanity’. I spent my whole days in front of my notebook without any reasons. I did not really care anymore about my school, my grade, or even people around me.  I felt more alive in my own world. My mother asked me to stop it and started studying because the test to enter a university was closer, I just answered by saying “yes, mom...” but I did not do it at all.

Supporting detail 2 : One day, my father found that I never studied for the test, he was angry then decided to send me to join the course for about one month and I said “okay”. It did not change anything at all. After went home, I did the same thing just as before.

Supporting detail 3 : The test was getting closer and finally it was begun. I still did not have any idea what I had learnt from my course, I just answered the questions that I knew, and the rest were by my own instinct. After that, my parents asked me about the test, I just simply said that it was not that bad. They seemed did not trust my words, I just smiled. My father said that if I could not pass the test, he would be very angry and about to do a bad thing or somekind of that. I thought that he would like to kill me.

Supporting detail 4 : Two weeks after the test, the result was announced via online, I could not hide my fears anymore. My parents impatiently waited me to say a word, I knew that they really wanted me to say “I am accepted”. I opened my account and checked it. I was panic and scared when I saw the words “sorry, you are not accepted”. I was confused how to tell that to my parents. I knew for sure that they would be very angry if they saw it, but I decided to let them knew and I had to take all the risk that I had made. I listened to all my father’s anger and I just cried without any words came out by my mouth. That day was so gloomy and my eyes were so puffy because of my tears.

Supporting detail 5 : Suddenly, my mother said to me slowly to stop crying, but I cried even harder and just could say sorry. She said that she had prepared the plan B for the worst condition. So, my mother asked me to prepare all the things to register on the other university, and she said that she did not want to see me sad anymore. I thanked her so much. At that time, I thought that my mother was a very kind person in the world. Then, I started to study hard and promised to never do the same thing anymore.

Concluding sentence : Finally, I was accepted in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I had learnt many things from that experience, never go full retard, do not be lazy to study, and always listen to your parents’ words. “Success” depends on the second letter of the word. If plan A  did not work, the alphabet still has 25 more letters.