Writing a Descriptive Paragraph (Indentifying paragraph with adequate and inadequate unity, and coherence)

A good paragraph is characterized by unity and coherence. State the main idea of the paragraph in a clearly constructed topic sentence. Make sure each sentence is related to the central thought. Then, develop the paragraph with specific details and examples. A paragraph with unity develops a single idea thoroughly and links it to the rest of the paper. Paragraph coherence is achieved when sentences are ordered in a logical manner and when clear transitions link sentences.

            How to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate unity :

1. Develop a paragraph around a major idea. Express this idea in the topic sentence.
2. Make the relationship between the main idea of the paragraph and the thesis of the paper clear. Don’t assume that the reader will “get it.” Spell it out for him/her.
3. Support the main idea of the paragraph with details.
4. Create separate paragraphs for those details that explore your topic from different perspectives.
5. Eliminate sentences that do not support the main idea. Alternately, you may revise the main idea to include those sentences.

            Paragraph coherence: Arrangement of ideas clear and in a logical order.

1. Decide on an order for your sentences that will best develop the paragraph’s main idea. Your supporting sentences are raw materials. They will not make sense to a reader unless they are put in order.
2. This order could be based on several factors:
3.  Chronological sequence. This is useful for describing a sequence of events.
4.  Modified chronology. Sometimes a major idea presented early in a paragraph can be supplemented with necessary background information.
5.  Spatial position of different objects. This method is useful for description.
6.   ‘Conversation’ between different experts. By moving between a series of key positions, a writer can establish a sense of dialogue and develop a complex argument.
7.  Logical form of argument. Some form of logical proof, like a syllogism, can serve as the basis for order.

DESCRIBING MYSELF

A Little Piece of Me

           

           To describe myself completely, I need to divide it into five aspects. They are background, physical appearance, education, personality and hobby.  First of all,  my name is Ritma Ratri Meilia, or “Ati ” as my family called me. I was born on May 6, 1995. It took eighteen years to create who I am today. I live in Bangunan village, Palas and that is in South Lampung. It is far enough to the location where I stay now in Metro. Second, I am a girl with brown skin, and black eyes. My weight is 48 kg and I am 155 cm. I think my weight and my tall is ideal. My face is oval. My nose is pointed enough. I wear a veil on my head. Third, I studied on Elementary School 2 Bangunan, Junior High School 1 Palas, and Senior Highschool 1 Palas. Then now, I am continuing to study in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I take English Education Departement and I am now in fourth semesters.  Fourth, I am a stolid girl in the class. I think I am also a computer geek as a lot of my friends say. The best thing about me is that I am just the way I am. The last, I have so many hobbies. I am always interested at many things, especially something new. I like listening to the music, like easy dubstep and classic rock. I am also an anime addict, my life is not complete without watching and updating anime series in every season. I am bad at singing, however things I do a lot is sing a song. I also love eating, my favorite food and drink are fried rice and watermelon juice.  I like spending my free time on Cyber world. I do not have much close friends, that’s why I often chat with my internet friends. I use to talk about some good movies and animes. Ever since, I do chatting with some foreigners via what’s app and facebook to increase my English skill. I like them so much, they are very kind. Finally, I hope I can be better in every aspect of me.

Notice : Yellow - Identification

             Green - Description

             Pink - Transition (Coherence)

             Red - Conlusion

 

Topic Sentence :  To describe myself completely, I need to divide it into five aspects.

Controlling Idea :  They are background, physical appearance, education, personality and hobby.

Supporting Sentences :  First of all,  my name is Ritma Ratri Meilia, or “Ati ” as my family called me. I was born on May 6, 1995. It took eighteen years to create who I am today. I live in Bangunan village, Palas and that is in South Lampung. It is far enough to the location where I stay now in Metro. Second, I am a girl with brown skin, and black eyes. My weight is 48 kg and I am 155 cm. I think my weight and my tall is ideal. My face is oval. My nose is pointed enough. I wear a veil on my head. Third, I studied on Elementary School 2 Bangunan, Junior High School 1 Palas, and Senior Highschool 1 Palas. Then now, I am continuing to study in Muhammadiyah University of Metro. I take English Education Departement and I am now in fourth semesters.  Fourth, I am a stolid girl in the class. I think I am also a computer geek as a lot of my friends say. The best thing about me is that I am just the way I am. The last, I have so many hobbies. I am always interested at many things, especially something new. I like listening to the music, like easy dubstep and classic rock. I am also an anime addict, my life is not complete without watching and updating anime series in every season. I am bad at singing, however things I do a lot is sing a song. I also love eating, my favorite food and drink are fried rice and watermelon juice.  I like spending my free time on Cyber world. I do not have much close friends, that’s why I often chat with my internet friends. I use to talk about some good movies and animes. Ever since, I do chatting with some foreigners via what’s app and facebook to increase my English skill. I like them so much, they are very kind.

Concluding Sentence : Finally, I hope I can be better in every aspect of me.